♥L♥ve is taking a taxi♥
♥It’s not taking a bus,♥
♥Where you can just wait,
♥And the bus comes♥
♥You will have to wave your hand, or even call♥
♥Then it will stop for you
♥It’s not driving your own car,
♥Where you can just hop on and go wherever you want
♥You will have to wait,
♥For the right car
♥If you run into an empty cab
♥You are lucky
♥But usually,
♥Taxis that come and pass,
♥Are already full of people
♥It’s not taking the sky train,
♥Where from the farthest to nearest
♥You can pay the same price
♥The price goes higher and higher,
♥As you go farther and farther
♥And eventually,
♥You reach your destination,
♥You’ve paid all your money,
♥And you left
♥With yourself all empty
This really gets to my heart. And the last line was where I went "this is so touching".
ReplyDeleteAnd totally agree with the line"the price goes higher and higher, as you go farther and farther." There are so much more things we have to think about after getting a certain "distance" in love.
I love this poem.
This poem is so cute. I love how you paid attention to little details such as beginning and ending each line with a heart. I enjoyed your analogies with going places because it's something everyone can relate to. I liked the styl of this piece and they way you contrasted everything.
ReplyDeleteNice work~
-Suzanne L.
I'd never thought about defining what love is as a taxi, I like the idea of it! Good job :)
ReplyDeleteWow. This poem left me with me amazed. I never imagined comparing love to a taxi and now that I read your poem, it correlates really well.
ReplyDeleteLove this poem (:
I like the first sentence.
ReplyDeleteLove is taking a taxi.
And in the last paragraph, you eventually reach your destination.
That is so great and beautiful.
I like how you putted symbols to represent love in your poem. Very good.
ReplyDeleteI really like the comparison of love and taxi, especially the last stanza that ends with "and you left with yourself all empty". It left me gazing. Very well done. :)
ReplyDeleteI love you writing style. Nice picture,
ReplyDeleteYou used small heart instead of "o"! That's so cute. I love the part you compare own car and taxi, which is vivid and impressive. You begin with heart as well. How sweat it is!
ReplyDeleteI love the hearts at the beginning and the end of each line! So romantic! I love your unique comparison, and I agree that we "pay the price", and get ourselves "empty", because the ones that love the most, are usually hurt the deepest. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThe hearts are a nice touch while not confusing but instead bringing out your point in a very romantic fashion. I like how you describe love as something that one can touch and expend, which is modern ($)
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